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Tim J Brennan

She Lives Anon

Post by Tim J Brennan » Sat May 05, 2018 8:32 am

Brutality
has always been
a player 

and, yes,
she does worry
about her future— 

in another life,
she was worth it; 

it’s good enough
for now.

indar
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Re: She Lives Anon

Post by indar » Sat May 05, 2018 12:45 pm

Hi Tim,

Another of your spare and ambiguous pieces. It's the final line that puzzles me--perhaps it is a conclusion that she tolerates brutality because of that axiom "better the devil you do know". A sad but true dilemma for many. Thoughtful poem.

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Colm Roe
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Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Colm Roe » Sat May 05, 2018 7:11 pm

I like the brevity, there's just enough information for the reader to fill in the gaps...to create their own version of the N's life. 
It's a neat and sad read, thanks for sharing.
 

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lshmael
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Re: She Lives Anon

Post by lshmael » Sun May 06, 2018 12:58 am

I think you have done well with what you have written. Although I probably would have enjoyed it more if it was a bit longer.

Tim J Brennan

Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Tim J Brennan » Mon May 07, 2018 7:06 am

indar wrote:
Sat May 05, 2018 12:45 pm
Hi Tim,

Another of your spare and ambiguous pieces. It's the final line that puzzles me--perhaps it is a conclusion that she tolerates brutality because of that axiom "better the devil you do know". A sad but true dilemma for many. Thoughtful poem.

Not sure "tolerate" is the right word, but many women are in abusive relationships, indar, not of their choice. Thanks.

Tim J Brennan

Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Tim J Brennan » Mon May 07, 2018 7:06 am

Colm Roe wrote:
Sat May 05, 2018 7:11 pm
I like the brevity, there's just enough information for the reader to fill in the gaps...to create their own version of the N's life. 
It's a neat and sad read, thanks for sharing.
 
You're welcome.
 

Tim J Brennan

Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Tim J Brennan » Mon May 07, 2018 7:08 am

lshmael wrote:
Sun May 06, 2018 12:58 am
I think you have done well with what you have written. Although I probably would have enjoyed it more if it was a bit longer.

I think you have done well with what you have written also, Ishmael.  I too would have enjoyed it more if it was a bit longer. Thank you.

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Fri May 11, 2018 1:02 pm

Line breaks are stunning.
The iambic closing resonates.
A poem with a punch.

T

Tim J Brennan

Re: She Lives Anon

Post by Tim J Brennan » Fri May 11, 2018 8:58 pm

Tracy Mitchell wrote:
Fri May 11, 2018 1:02 pm
Line breaks are stunning.
The iambic closing resonates.
A poem with a punch.

T

Thank you, Tracy.  Appreciate your words.  

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