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Moon Landing
Moon Landing
When the advanced race
of Ribbed Ameba landed
on the moon,
they globbed aghast
at irrefutable evidence:
there in ancient moondust
the bodily imprint
of a Ribbed Ameba child
that predated by millenia
the scientific consensus
they had evolved
only after the great extinction
of the first wave of life.
Re: Moon Landing
This was fun until it provided that great kicker at the end. Thought provoking.
Dave
Dave
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Re: Moon Landing
Good Lord, Indar -- what scope of vision, what depth in so few words.
It is a blunt and accurate assessment that we are, relatively speaking, ribbed ameba.
I agree with Dave about the devastating effect of the closing lines. What tickled me more, though, what this phrase: ". . . they globbed aghast/at irrefutable evidence:. . . ."
Powerful and poetic-- the total package in this poem, Indar.
Bravo.
T
It is a blunt and accurate assessment that we are, relatively speaking, ribbed ameba.
I agree with Dave about the devastating effect of the closing lines. What tickled me more, though, what this phrase: ". . . they globbed aghast/at irrefutable evidence:. . . ."
Powerful and poetic-- the total package in this poem, Indar.
Bravo.
T
Re: Moon Landing
Thank you both Dave and Tracy. Trouble is this one does not stand alone without the photo. So what I propose is a poetry forum strictly for poems that require visual aids. Will you be making plans to start one anytime soon Tracy?
- Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Moon Landing
Indar - check Founder's Forum
Re: Moon Landing
Thank you both Dave and Tracy. Trouble is this one does not stand alone without the photo. So what I propose is a poetry forum strictly for poems that require visual aids. Will you be making plans to start one anytime soon Tracy?
Can you make poem look like the boot print? It's so iconic....