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Dave
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starving the breath

Post by Dave » Wed May 15, 2019 1:24 pm

Spokes in the wheel spins,
she squeals, a blur of arms
and silk, head back, mouth
starving the breath of name:
captured in the picture

I now hold - time’s blank
voiceless charade, a scene
I can mime like a cheap actor
who draws shapes and echos
from a glaze of chemicals.

indar
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Re: starving the breath

Post by indar » Wed May 15, 2019 2:45 pm

I can mime like a cheap actor
who draws shapes and echos

from a glaze of chemicals.

This almost took my breath away Dave. What an eloquent statement of the power of image. Beyond that the distance between the physical make-up of the object and the reality it represents to the N kind of points out the reality of the religious object, the power of symbol. I love it of course.

Spokes in the wheel spins,

Is the above grammatically correct? Should it be "spokes spin"?

Dave
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Re: starving the breath

Post by Dave » Wed May 15, 2019 4:09 pm

Thanks Indar. Yes of course it is a typing/Grammar error.
Photos are funny aren't they?

indar
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Re: starving the breath

Post by indar » Sun May 19, 2019 2:56 pm

Photos are funny aren't they?

Yes. Maybe they are what really separates us from other species in the animal kingdom.


 

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