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Mark
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Post by Mark » Sat Jul 06, 2019 8:05 pm

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When Death frowns from a heavy sky,
the importance of molecules is inverted.
You inhale the stealth of magnetic aether
and quantum intimations. Alas, alas, the coils.




 

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Re: Cycle

Post by indar » Mon Jul 08, 2019 3:01 pm

Here's Mark with one of his quatrains for us to puzzle out. :D

I've read this a number of times and get this feeling of archaic language mixed with the wildest scientific speculation that is in line with a persistent human fear. 

Alas alas the coil, of course caused me to google the Shakespeare quote: 

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mortal_coil

Alas alas the very air we breathe in this modern world. 

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Re: Cycle

Post by Colm Roe » Tue Jul 09, 2019 1:28 am

Mark wrote:
Sat Jul 06, 2019 8:05 pm
.When Death frowns from a heavy sky,
the importance of molecules is inverted.
You inhale the stealth of magnetic aether
and quantum intimations. Alas, alas, the coils.




 
I like this Mark. When faced with the 'spectre', minutes and seconds become kings.
Catching the smell of an impending 'storm'...small hints. Nice writing.
Still can't enjoy the 'alases' though.   

 

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Re: Cycle

Post by Dave » Tue Jul 09, 2019 8:36 am

Clever Mark Poem. Welcome back
Dave

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Mark
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Re: Cycle

Post by Mark » Wed Jul 10, 2019 9:37 pm

Thanks for read and comments, guys. A Napo 2018 retread.

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Cycle

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Sat Jul 13, 2019 3:49 am

New sprouts in the turnip patch!!  :D :D

A frowning death downs the up quarks, 
ups the down quarks, flushes magnetic infinity 
from the flux, finally, unpacks coils in the engine 
of your stealth cycle, cycling into a heavy sky.


I'm getting too old for this.

And yes, welcome back Mark.  :D

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Mark
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Re: Cycle

Post by Mark » Sat Jul 13, 2019 7:21 pm

Aah yes, turnip-speak.  :mrgreen:   Good quad there, Ty.

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Re: Cycle

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Sat Jul 13, 2019 8:09 pm

:D :D

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