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Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by Deb » Sun Sep 08, 2019 5:28 am

Resurrecting an old poem in remembrance of that fateful day on 9/11.


Tuesday's Towers



Tuesday for two

towers with a view.

Rattled awake.

Alarm, denial, grief

stare into the serpent's eye.

Humans falling from the sky.



Debris rains in gray, black billows

churning guts, clutching pillows.

No mistake

lives taken by a thief.

Time stands, still,

a dusting of September chill.




Blown apart,

airplanes, pieces of your heart.

Fallen icon's wake.

Staring, crying, disbelief.

A sea of blue

two towers taken out of view.


~Deb

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Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by poet-e » Mon Sep 09, 2019 10:45 pm

Timely.

Glad it's not too sentimental.

"serpent's eye" = evil?

Whose point of view is it?  The towers?

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Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by Deb » Wed Sep 11, 2019 7:38 pm

poet-e wrote:
Mon Sep 09, 2019 10:45 pm
Timely.

Glad it's not too sentimental.

"serpent's eye" = evil?

Whose point of view is it?  The towers?
Hi E, 

POV? It was mine but it could be the tower's POV too. I actually like that notion.

Yes, the serpent depicts evil here but that isn't my overall take on all snakes. They are rather beautiful creatures. 

I used to be a flight attendant and was scared out of my mind for all the flight crews out that day. It was a complete gut-punch for me and many others. The people I know who still fly for the airlines continue to struggle with it, pilots, flight attendants, gate agents, passengers, everyone became paranoid - lots of stuff went haywire and flying as I knew it changed dramatically after this horrible event.
 
The sea of blue depicts sadness for fallen comrades (most uniforms were dark blue at the time) as well as the empty space left by the towers after they fell.

I couldn't get more sentimental or I wouldn't have been able to write it through the tears. It still makes my stomach churn

Thank you for reading and commenting. 


~Deb
 

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Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by poet-e » Thu Sep 12, 2019 11:08 pm

POV as a flight attendant'd be interesting too.

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Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by Matty11 » Fri Sep 13, 2019 1:42 pm

Hi deb,

I used to be a flight attendant -
I feel that would be the right title to personalise your poem and defined the viewpoint.

best

Phil
 

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Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget

Post by indar » Fri Sep 13, 2019 4:35 pm

Hi Deb,

As I read the first line "Tuesday for two" I thought of an old song "Tea for Two" and thought what a good title that first line  would make. It was such a beautiful blue-sky day i decided to walk to my dentist appointment. Nice days can turn in an instant and the shock remains forever. That first line sounds lighthearted and then the shock of what happened on that day turns between one line and the next. Good write.

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