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The Blood Blade

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Matty11
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The Blood Blade

Post by Matty11 » Sat Sep 14, 2019 5:17 am

it was the time the moist mist parted,
the mother tree emerald with light

it was the time the blue bird blazed
a plumed display to dazzle my eye

it was the time the pearls whispered
to swim in waves beyond my play

it was the time the elder shared
her warmest smile, her eyes so pale

it was the time my sisters adorned my skin
in red earth, their hands gentle and cunning

it was the time alone in the heart I heard
myself alive, the forest breathing  

it was the time the shadow came,
danced the blood blade within my secret cave

it was the time one became two became one,
within the root I found my warmest smile seeded

poet-e
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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by poet-e » Mon Sep 16, 2019 7:02 pm

Nice lang/imagery!

Love "blue bird blazed"

Confused on the blood blade, but it shifts the poem darker?

Matty11
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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by Matty11 » Tue Sep 17, 2019 4:25 am

Thanks P. Pleased you enjoyed the expression. Whether the 'blood blade' makes the poem darker depends on the reader.

best

Phil.

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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by indar » Tue Sep 17, 2019 7:07 pm

I don't have a clue what this one is "about" but it certainly appeals to me in an ancient tribal ritual way. the beautiful imagery is saved from some kind of romanticism by the intro of savagery as well. Interesting write.

Matty11
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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by Matty11 » Wed Sep 18, 2019 4:39 am

Thank you Linda. Pleased it appealed and interested.

all the best

Phil

poet-e
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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by poet-e » Wed Sep 18, 2019 5:41 pm

Agree with @indar; confused but enjoyed it.

Matty11
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Re: The Blood Blade

Post by Matty11 » Thu Sep 19, 2019 11:13 am

She is a virgin being wedded. The 'blood blade' is the male organ.

best

Phil
 

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