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indar
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Memo to the Following:

Post by indar » Mon Oct 07, 2019 7:06 pm

Memo to the Following:

Zeus
Olympus, Mountain Top,
 
Oden
Asgard, End of Rainbow Bridge,
 
Yahweh
Burning Bush, Desert Wilderness,
 
The Hindu Crowd
Amarvatiaka Meru, Varkkunthu, Everest,
 
Kunitokoachi and Amenominakanushi
9 Fold Cloud Layer, Sun Moon Sea,
 
please relay this memo to anyone I've missed.
 
Where have you been?
 
Haven't you noticed 
the rumble of planet crust;
 
the smell of forest fire and brimstone;
 
the wandering to and fro, up and down
of the displaced and desperate?
 
When will you step in?
 
Why have we worshipped you these many years
if all you plan to do is leave it up to us?
 
 
 
 
 

poet-e
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Re: Memo to the Following:

Post by poet-e » Fri Oct 11, 2019 12:11 am

Clever!

Perhaps less gods.

I'd flip the last 2 stanzas.

Matty11
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Re: Memo to the Following:

Post by Matty11 » Fri Oct 11, 2019 2:00 pm

Like it Indar. I'd suggest the opposite to P., because of the 'fun', more gods :)

Odin rather than Oden?

best

Phil

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Colm Roe
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Re: Memo to the Following:

Post by Colm Roe » Tue Oct 15, 2019 1:34 am

Losing your religion Linda?
Some cultures believe they actually deserved whatever miseries befall them  :roll:
If you're thinking of writing a letter...don't waste the stamp...They're not listening.
Say your prayers, I do, out of habit, for other people...just in case  :)
Although I'm thinking we should all, en masse, stop entertaining Their egos...They might hear the silence!
Loved the poem  ;)
 

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