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Matty11
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Mrs Shakespeare Plots

Post by Matty11 » Thu Mar 19, 2020 5:22 pm

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With this phial a subtle closure
to his contempt. My pride is vain,
but that beggared, so ragged
apothecary I will trust.

An ounce of civet is enough
to distract him, and hebenon
for peace. A redolent demise.
His conceit goads me on to act.

I'll brag in whispers, be not loud,
and laud mischief with this potion.
He will not know for his lust is blind.
No rapier thrust from him tonight.

In solitude let public grief
be shed, discard that cloth, and sleep.



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I'll brag in whispers, be not loud,
and laud mischief with this potion.
He should glean, but he's lust blind
with haste. No rapier thrust tonight.

With this phial a subtle closure
to all contempt. Pride hugs itself,
that toad-spotted, so ragged
apothecary I will trust.

An ounce of civet is enough
for distraction, and hebenon
for peace. An elegant deceit.
Conceit shall goad poison to act.

In solitude let pleasing grief
be shed, discard that cloth, and sleep.
Last edited by Matty11 on Sun Mar 22, 2020 10:14 am, edited 1 time in total.

indar
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Re: Perfidy

Post by indar » Thu Mar 19, 2020 6:33 pm

OK what's going on here? Viral poetry is fabulous. Will be back.

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Colm Roe
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Re: Perfidy

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Mar 20, 2020 3:12 am

Hi Phil,
A bit 'old English' :) but I do really like this.
They're all good, but S2 and S4 absolutely sparkle.
Sounds like you have some victim in mind? :shock:
Thanks for sharing.

Matty11
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Re: Perfidy

Post by Matty11 » Fri Mar 20, 2020 6:52 am

Thanks Linda and Colm. The poem is about a wife poisoning her husband or at least thinking about it. The style is parody, with a few nods to the Bard...Lear, R&J, and Hamlet. So yes, some 'ye olde English' crime entertainment :D

all the best

Phil

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