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murmac
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Making sense of Sense

Post by murmac » Sun May 24, 2020 2:59 am

Sweeping away the dreams.
What dude?
You expected.
Excellent adventures?

Burning down the highway.
Angels see me fly.
Matching the strangers.
East meets the wettest bear.

Haunted by my bending blues.
Mad lover, take cover.
Gonna dance along the shore.
The human experiment.

(No purely negative responses, please, otherwise I will delete. You can respond negatively, as long as you add something positive and helpful at the end, for me to think about.)
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Re: Making sense of Sense (This is a reposting. No purely negative responses, otherwise I will delete again)

Post by Colm Roe » Sun May 24, 2020 3:08 am

Hi murma,
It's really late here, I'll post a comment tomorrow after I read it properly.
I'll just say you're not going to get many replies if you don't remove the threat to delete the poem.
You're obviously not happy...take a beak, or take a listen to this:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PH0rzBS ... A&index=30

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Re: Making sense of Sense (This is a reposting. No purely negative responses, otherwise I will delete again)

Post by murmac » Sun May 24, 2020 3:37 am

Colm Roe wrote:
Sun May 24, 2020 3:08 am
Hi murma,
It's really late here, I'll post a comment tomorrow after I read it properly.
I'll just say you're not going to get many replies if you don't remove the threat to delete the poem.
You're obviously not happy...take a beak, or take a listen to this:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PH0rzBS ... A&index=30

Your response was fine on the other thread.

Colm Roe wrote:
Thu May 14, 2020 1:27 am
murmac wrote:
Wed May 13, 2020 7:09 pm
Overall, in all my poems, I like to burr the line between normally understood poetry and truly weird, mysterious, far out stuff. It’s almost like baby talk, in a sense. I like to be on the edge of learning. I don’t want to be stuck, knowing all the rules, but with no desire to create.

Reading this I'm wondering if I should start taking acid again, or maybe a few mushrooms.
It would probably make sense then :)
I would like to be able to glean a better sense of cohesion from your poems. I'm not suggesting
a major change in the way you write. Maybe it's just me, but I always feel like you've
invited me to your house, but I can't figure out if the door is locked...or just jammed.

And don't say 'Push harder!' :lol:

Anywho, I enjoy the madness :)

I think I responded with a couple of quotes from Timothy Leary. Thanks again. I liked the Borsalino music.

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Re: Making sense of Sense (This is a reposting)

Post by Colm Roe » Sun May 24, 2020 5:20 pm

:)

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Re: Making sense of Sense (This is a reposting)

Post by murmac » Mon May 25, 2020 1:19 pm

Colm Roe wrote:
Sun May 24, 2020 5:20 pm
:)
Thanks.

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