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Matty11
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The Audition

Post by Matty11 » Sun Jul 26, 2020 4:58 am

This gaudy thing bobbing in burlesque
offers a bawdy dance and even mimes
some teasing slapstick fun. Her tinsel dreams

of screen star fame faded with the talkies
because her country accent was never posh.
She strips without a blush. Hears the applause.

I light a cigar for images say it best,
like a hard slap, and through the fug breathe in
my cunning schemes. I applaud my craft.
Last edited by Matty11 on Tue Jul 28, 2020 5:34 am, edited 1 time in total.

indar
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Re: The Narcissists

Post by indar » Mon Jul 27, 2020 9:49 pm

Hi Phil,

If I am reading this anywhere near the intended meaning there are two actors here the faded movie star and perhaps her paramour or at least a male counterpart. Neither an authentic personality but interested only in how they perceive themselves as being perceived. The applause is validation for her and the very masculine behavior of the wealthy cigar (winner) smoker he believes projects the correct image for him. Somehow I want a little more concrete imagery in a poem so much about image. This is a subject worth much inspection and further understanding for it is misunderstood by so many. What about the modern world causes so much narcissistic behavior if not the full blown personality disorder?

Matty11
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Re: The Narcissists

Post by Matty11 » Tue Jul 28, 2020 5:33 am

Neither an authentic personality but interested only in how they perceive themselves as being perceived.

Exactly Linda, though I think I need to use my original title to define the relationship.

What about the modern world causes so much narcissistic behavior if not the full blown personality disorder?

Fair point Linda. I've been re-reading 'Pride and Prejudice' and Victorian/Edwardian literature. Perhaps my strategy to disengage from the 'modern world' , but the themes are well trodden (Narcissist/Echo being a classical myth)

all the best

Phil

indar
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Re: The Audition

Post by indar » Tue Jul 28, 2020 10:44 pm

The change of title makes quite a difference. If I understand the psychological definition of narcissism it has more to do with no sense of self other than through the feedback from others--imaginary or otherwise. These two feed off one another as I see it.

"Narcissism" along with "surreal" are two words that have been thrown around a lot lately.  
 

Matty11
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Re: The Audition

Post by Matty11 » Wed Jul 29, 2020 6:11 am

"Narcissism" along with "surreal" are two words that have been thrown around a lot lately.

I didn't realise that Linda, though I am aware that Trump has been described as a narcissist. My context was more the 'creative' world than the political world. Obviously conceit/arrogance/vanity/narcissism are human characteristics in a range of contexts for readers as in all subject matter.

best

Phil

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