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- Sun Nov 26, 2023 6:01 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Walls of Alhambra
- Replies: 7
- Views: 8022
Re: The Walls of Alhambra
Hey Greg Your poems continue to be absorbing, intelligent and imaginative. I would still consider the number of modifiers you employ. The poem moves both physically and emotionally whne you use strong verbs rather than adjectives though some work excellently as in line "honeyed". Sometimes I think y...
- Wed Nov 22, 2023 10:50 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Weather
- Replies: 7
- Views: 8919
Weather
A poem from Fives November now open for comment: in the original and then modified forms Weather original Striped glass fills a huge blue void; rain from a clear solid sky breaks expectation into lightning shards. Clouds smile along, shaped as folds in a sunfilled down of feathers. Wet music runs...
- Wed Nov 22, 2023 10:24 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Nathaniel's Waves
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4295
Re: Nathaniel's Waves
Hey Greg This is a mixed bag for me with lines I like a lot, such as the opening line, which is highly original and other lines which to me to be both telly and clichéd. I have little idea who Nathaniel is or was but am guessing someone biblical. So, my thinking on this. Great first lines followed b...
- Tue Nov 21, 2023 10:53 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Fiddling with Romance
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4679
Re: Fiddling with Romance
I agree with Colm: a personal, confessional romantic poem that works really weel. Touching and sensual. Good writing
- Tue Nov 21, 2023 10:50 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Silence
- Replies: 9
- Views: 13017
Re: Silence
Hey Colm
Atypical Colm piece in the best sense, playful, meaningful and with an easy way with words and pictures. Nicely done
Atypical Colm piece in the best sense, playful, meaningful and with an easy way with words and pictures. Nicely done
- Thu Nov 09, 2023 1:31 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: What of Thought and Feeling-Sentience
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3739
Re: What of Thought and Feeling-Sentience
Hey Greg
The five poems in five days is on another thread here on the site called fives and runs from the fifth of every month til the nineth. As for posting a second poem too soon, not sur ewhy unless it is felt yout comment on others' poems before doing so. However, I noticed you did comment.
The five poems in five days is on another thread here on the site called fives and runs from the fifth of every month til the nineth. As for posting a second poem too soon, not sur ewhy unless it is felt yout comment on others' poems before doing so. However, I noticed you did comment.
- Wed Nov 08, 2023 10:42 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: What of Thought and Feeling-Sentience
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3739
Re: What of Thought and Feeling-Sentience
Hey Greg As my Irish friend said this is an excellent start. Perhaps a tad overly poetic for some but perfectly well formed for others. There is scope for exploring other wordings perhaps as ome are close to cliché, though fitting to the style here. (shing golds, splendour and winter's encasement. I...
- Sun Oct 22, 2023 7:46 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Leaving the Nest
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12505
Re: Leaving the Nest
Simple clear and sweetly playful. Nice write.
The grey squirrals came from America to Europe and bullied the reds follwed by Black squirrals bullying the greys. A funny lot.
The grey squirrals came from America to Europe and bullied the reds follwed by Black squirrals bullying the greys. A funny lot.
- Mon Sep 25, 2023 7:33 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: North on the Starliner
- Replies: 5
- Views: 16587
Re: North on the Starliner
Exceptionally good Linda. As Gyppo says wonderfully visual.
- Tue Aug 29, 2023 1:19 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: City Planners
- Replies: 7
- Views: 16371
Re: City Planners
You are right of course Mark.