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- Mon Feb 03, 2020 1:48 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Aspen Sisters
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6125
Re: Aspen Sisters
Back for a second read! I love the title, Tracy, and the whole poem -- but after second reading, I think it would be improved if you start out with the second stanza? That's really where the poem begins, for me. Also, I would replace back bedroom with back room, to avoid repetition of "bed" twice ...
- Mon Jan 20, 2020 1:29 pm
- Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
- Topic: Hello, I'm Trish Saunders... from Seattle/Honolulu
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17835
Re: Hello, I'm Trish Saunders... from Seattle/Honolulu
Thank you, Sharon, glad to be here.
- Fri Jan 17, 2020 7:55 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
- Replies: 13
- Views: 10166
Re: Big Orange Sun
Hi, Sharon; I've received very useful feedback on this poem, including yours, and I'm putting it to use. Thanks for the advice re: woods. I think you're right about that. Warm regards,
Trish
Trish
- Fri Jan 17, 2020 7:53 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
- Replies: 13
- Views: 10166
Re: Big Orange Sun
Hi Indar, I appreciate all of the fb I've received, it's amazing how much trouble people have gone to and I'm putting it to use. Thank you especially for the advice re: verbs. I"m also rethinking the title. I love Italy (as who does not?) and hope to return to spend a year in so in Rome. (It may be ...
- Fri Jan 17, 2020 9:45 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Spectacle of Death
- Replies: 18
- Views: 11397
Re: Spectacle of Death
Deb, I'm sorry for the loss and for what seems like callous behavior (or at least highly unprofessional behavior) from the funeral directors. I've had the numbing experience of receiving relentless selling pitches and upselling, while you're trying to pick out a coffin...Then I've had the opposite, ...
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 11:32 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
- Views: 13005
Re: Island Fiction
"convey the mundane" - yes, I see that. How to put this? Maybe there is a more original way of expressing mundanity?
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 11:27 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
- Replies: 13
- Views: 10166
Re: Big Orange Sun
Hi Phil,
The serenity is the wished-for life; I think this poem was confusing to some people and it needs some work to make the meaning clearer; or your read just wasn't quite what I had expressed. Thanks for the notes!
Trish
The serenity is the wished-for life; I think this poem was confusing to some people and it needs some work to make the meaning clearer; or your read just wasn't quite what I had expressed. Thanks for the notes!
Trish
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 3:36 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
- Replies: 13
- Views: 10166
Re: Big Orange Sun
I see, hmmm, I'll have a think on that, Thanks.
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 2:40 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
- Replies: 13
- Views: 10166
Re: Big Orange Sun
Thank you, Wren, good to see you, as well! I will meet you at the Train Station
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 1:46 pm
- Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
- Topic: Hello, I'm Trish Saunders... from Seattle/Honolulu
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17835
Re: Hello, I'm Trish Saunders... from Seattle/Honolulu
I don't know, I hope it does ...
I know that bouncing around empties out my checking account pretty quickly, but can't help that!
Thanks, Tracy
I know that bouncing around empties out my checking account pretty quickly, but can't help that!
Thanks, Tracy