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Strong and effective narrative, Tim.  Good time capsule of the small town in Wisconsin.  It could have been any town in the midwest - phone booth in the cornfield - it was almost like that.  And yes, we couldn't walk by one with checking the slot.  :)   I didn't think kids died from lighter fluid - ...

The world is outside, visible in light, and finite in the dark, flat.  The Speaker is pulled back, back from the inner universe, which is presumably none of these.  There is trepidation in the voice.  

That's what I see.

T
 

Thanks Dave.

I will reconsider S.2.

T

Sorry Dave, I re-read my post and it sounded condescending -- not my intention at all.

T

.         Open Fields I am in line today again without thinking-  it is what I do. I am with comrades I don’t know.   I watch from sweating fields,  trampled fields of stubble,  pocked with stodgy grids  of unmarked graves  dimpling the earth. God gathers us back from Fallujah, from Da Nang, Verdun,...

Hi Dave -- good to be back.

Buzz -- The Speaker was young, alive, wired, couldn't sleep -- you know, buzzing

Hope all is well with you.

And thanks for reading this and commenting.

Thanks too for feedback to Phil, Mark an Lynn. 


T

Thanks Phil!

I love the fizz suggestion.  I'm adopting it.  

I do now.

Pour the shit through the funnel. 

T

Mark -- 

Your edit puts the right margin in wonderful Markist form which works in its own way.

This is a [double reverse] etheree so I am constrained by the descending and ascending syllable counts. 

Good to see you here.

T