Banishing the beggar from suburbia’s gated community -- This reads like a parable, but I resist the lesson.
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- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:30 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: on a border
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3972
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:28 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Cemetery Walk
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3761
Re: Cemetery Walk
If I am understanding this right, the poem is a clever, light, and rather direct narration by a spirit who hasn’t gotten to the other side yet. The line breaks seem artful. The sounds and pauses in the first two stanzas are especially nice. I was initially feeling that S.3 L.3 was the weak link, ...
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:25 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Witness
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5475
Re: Witness
Late to the party on this one.
Psychic nightmare, this recitation. The witness of a mirror - very powerful. The voice of his mother conjures the gremlins of a traumatic childhood now running amok within him. The last three lines are a stunning, well earned ending.
Excellent writing, Tim.
T
Psychic nightmare, this recitation. The witness of a mirror - very powerful. The voice of his mother conjures the gremlins of a traumatic childhood now running amok within him. The last three lines are a stunning, well earned ending.
Excellent writing, Tim.
T
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:23 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: dryness
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5661
Re: dryness
Death in abstentia. The sense of substance, feeling, and emotion vacating the world, like a film over everything. Something happens - unsettling the dust - but means nothing. Even the decedent is absent. Sad poem, I don’t know if I got it all, or most, or some. Still, it made me think, reflect, ...
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:21 pm
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- Topic: bruised
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5287
Re: bruised
Drug deal gone bad, someone (Speaker) got the snot beat out of ‘em. S. 5 & S.6 are wonderful! Love the closing rhyme. Not sure why the commas at the conclusion of L.2 & L.3, but am grateful that practice discontinues. You might consider losing the closing period as well. Just a thought. “. . . ...
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:18 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: the anchor
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4103
Re: the anchor
Will Your Anchor Hold In the Storms of Life This poem consists of five stanzas, alternating free verse lines of 2-3-2-3-2. The Speaker is in a church which has the customary large-scale crucifix - Jesus suffers and bleeds . The poem's Speaker engages in the ritual hand-shaking with those around h...
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:14 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: 6G
- Replies: 12
- Views: 7803
Re: 6G
Parts of this suggest the title "The Day After". Just saying.
- Fri Jul 06, 2018 6:13 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: 6G
- Replies: 12
- Views: 7803
Re: 6G
I can’t say how delighted I was this morning to wake to the sight of new colored lights winking at me through the window from the turnip patch out back. This poem envisions something beyond the quaintly imagined Armageddon of bygone literature. This approaches absolute zero on the neuro-synaptic t...
- Mon Jun 04, 2018 6:14 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Do Tell
- Replies: 10
- Views: 7338
Re: Do Tell
I love the ending to this Tim. It takes a while getting there, but maybe the meander is your point. The phrase ‘think thoughts’ doesn’t work for me, and the grammar in S.7 is wobbly.
Still, the strengths of the poem are evident and abundant.
Cheers.
T
Still, the strengths of the poem are evident and abundant.
Cheers.
T
- Mon Jun 04, 2018 6:05 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: In her garden
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9566
Re: In her garden
Hi Phil,
I like the tear/hear/fear echoes. The sounds of the poem are good.
Sorry, I'm not making much sense of the text.
T
I like the tear/hear/fear echoes. The sounds of the poem are good.
Sorry, I'm not making much sense of the text.
T