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This is Disney does Thesaurus.

Marc Gilbert wrote: ↑

Tue Jan 30, 2018 11:40 am

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. . .  and I think it reinforces the indifference.


 

It certainly does mine.

Pick a piece of wood floating in the river and follow it down the current with your glance, keeping the eyes constantly on it, without getting ahead of the current. This is the way poetry should be read: at the pace of a line.

-- Vera Pavlova

I can't tell you how much I love this poem. :)  Its unprepossessing tenor instructs on how vast and non-polemic a poem can be--  understanding/appreciation from the grassroots upward.  The artful metaphoric thread is the tree in all of its symbolic forms, invoking majesty, mystery, connectedness, an...

Good thoughts, Indar.  I took Frank to be a singular asshole rather than symbol of all hunters.  And I took Frank's spur of the moment shot at the hawk to have simply resulted from the idiot seeing what he concluded to be an easy target.  An SUV or high-suspension pick up is often necessary to acces...

I too like this poem very much.  The depth of your narrative style is very becoming for presentation of this stream of thought. The N now experiences what s/he only imagined the feelings to be.  Very powerful. S.6 is almost an aside tossed to the audience, and yet is the deep breath slowly let out -...

Beautiful, David.  Succinct, well told.  There are small gems embedded, waiting for the reader - like the rain gutters overflowing with . . . weeds. :D   So good!  And the line endings are so well crafted, the poem really flows.   Each stanza starts with a lean, clean enticing line.  Not easy to mak...

Choosing your own moment - what an interesting idea.  The N has the water drawn, the whiskey poured, and the music playing.  The water is too hot and after reviewing options, N chooses to wait.  Waiting for water to cool -- not exactly like waiting for water to boil, but there is that parallel.  Bot...

Subtle, Marc.  N is milking those last moments before he has to rise.  He's awake, and getting his mental bearings.  He clicks off the alarm - there is no risk he will fall back to sleep, he's already thinking about meetings, etc., and I assume to-do lists are assembling in his brain on their own.  ...

Indar --  The overwhelming majority of duck hunters would agree with me that Frank is one serious sleeze-dog.  He illegally takes a hawk on a whim, happens to know a taxidermist who is willing to defy/ignore federal law to mount it, and then illegally displays it.  Geez, even I don't know that low-l...