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- Thu May 05, 2022 2:14 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Two Boys With A Stick
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1205
Re: Two Boys With A Stick
I enjoyed this, Gyppo, especially thinking how young rural boys here sometimes define a friend by how willing he is to drop everything and go to fetch firewood with you. But your bigger point about boys and their sticks (and men and their sticks) opens my eyes. Is that another cause of our huge...
- Thu May 05, 2022 1:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Mouse Hairs by Moonlight
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1452
Re: Mouse Hairs by Moonlight
Eric, this is captivating. I especially like the movement from less to (in the last six lines) greater emotional involvement, making the last two lines all the more powerful.
Jackie
- Tue Apr 05, 2022 5:42 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Marrow
- Replies: 4
- Views: 862
Re: Marrow
Fun, Trev. I'll be you could find an artist who'd enjoy working with this.
Jackie
Jackie
- Mon Apr 04, 2022 4:05 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Green Man
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1412
Re: The Green Man
So many wonderful descriptions, Eric, like “fishes for sunlight.” The Green Man is my own idea of the legendary Johnny Appleseed. The voice is interesting here. You tiptoe around being didactic about your theme—that’s a hard balance to keep. Just two italicized quotes from his preaching, and the...
- Mon Apr 04, 2022 3:45 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Finale
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1414
Re: Finale
Phil, I do like your sonnet, a mixture of a classic opening and classic worries with intimate, personal details. It feels so forgiving to read.
Could line 12 lose a comma and gain a question mark?
Much enjoyed
Jackie
Could line 12 lose a comma and gain a question mark?
Much enjoyed
Jackie
- Mon Apr 04, 2022 3:32 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Breakdowns
- Replies: 2
- Views: 685
Re: Breakdowns
Eric, I like the way your characterization is everywhere—meanings of words, visual appearance of the poem, and sound effects. The stanzas about Her stumble clumsily between lines of irregular length and two-beaters, while the stanza about Me is elegantly aligned rows. She expires as a thing that nev...
- Thu Mar 24, 2022 2:50 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Remote
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1082
Re: Remote
Thank you, Linda and Colm. I guess one of those cynical moments you go through. Linda, I wondered if anyone would ask about the caps. I was trying to write an Octologue: A snippet of eavesdropped conversation, a bit of dialogue, monologue, any thought that is or can be spoken aloud. It must be a co...
- Sun Mar 20, 2022 8:07 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Another Red Flag
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1415
Re: Another Red Flag
Oh, dear, Linda. If this is personal, I want to give you a big hug. :shock: I do love the poem. Especially the first stanza, and the ending. It takes me right along, masterfully, but I want to shout "Whoa!". How about "through" the night instead of "into"? It seems clearer, and you're building up t...
- Fri Mar 18, 2022 8:38 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Remote
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1082
Remote
He extends
The remote—my choice.
I take it
For a while
And train the clicked-at
Screen. I know
It’s to keep
Me nearby.
- Thu Mar 17, 2022 2:18 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: If I Could
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1226
Re: If I Could
Thanks so much for your comments, all.
My head is into prose right now, with several projects going, so I'm actually doing "if I could" quite a lot these days.
Jackie
My head is into prose right now, with several projects going, so I'm actually doing "if I could" quite a lot these days.
Jackie