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A good poem Gyypo.
'floaty' and 'strappy' don't work for me though,
and if it were mine I would cut the last line.
Nice read.

A good read, and the 'blazing palm tree' are memorable.

Thanks for the read Bruise, its appreciated.

Most of his mature life had been a process of recoiling and mending. Until late he had not suspected that this prolonged retreat had been his lot. He thought he was building bricks, constructing a living edifice while in realty he was engaged in an epic dismantling. He thought he had made inroads, ...

Thanks Gyppo,
my child mind surfaces at off times.

Thanks Calm Rose,
I express my faith with irreligious words!

God is most definitely in the detail. The poem makes it's point but probably underlkines it. I think less would be more here.
Nevertheless I liked the read.

Such a thin wafer to be the body of Christ. The Kid tried to figure how many wafers they could make out of one body. Then there was the wine-blood thing. His older sibling would let him sip beer, he brother boasted that he often got pissed and that wine was just piss-water. The kid believed in the ...

Hi Dave,
got to agree with Trevor here.
I think the first three stanza's are the poem. You say nothing much after that.
Keep working on it.

Hi Dave yeo you're right' I can see that it did not connect
It is a self-involved muse that tickled my poetic bones at the time, so
no regrets. Well maybe...