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- Tue May 29, 2018 11:29 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Candyland
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5829
Re: Candyland
I have a sweet tooth, but even my teeth hurt from all of the sugar/candy references in the first stanza. :D But it seems the Narrator of the poem has an endless appetite for the saccharine. The opening of the first two stanzas – Can you and I float. . . / Can you and I ride. . . – suggests this ...
- Tue May 29, 2018 10:16 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Musically Motivated
- Replies: 10
- Views: 7720
Re: Musically Motivated
Very nice, Indar. Googling gave me some further understanding, but the heart of the poem is right there. I tend to agree with Anna about the closing.
Cheers.
T
Cheers.
T
- Mon May 28, 2018 3:59 pm
- Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
- Topic: Hi
- Replies: 2
- Views: 9876
Re: Hi
Hi,
Welcome. Hope you find the site to your liking. Most of the writers here are seeking to improve their writing, and feedback to your poems will reflect that. Just so you know.
Cheers.
T
Welcome. Hope you find the site to your liking. Most of the writers here are seeking to improve their writing, and feedback to your poems will reflect that. Just so you know.
Cheers.
T
- Mon May 21, 2018 3:27 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Tuber
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2505
Re: Tuber
Trago--
Mister Potato Head! Nice poem.
Yes, we are all potatoes in the dark earth.
Well done.
T
Mister Potato Head! Nice poem.
Yes, we are all potatoes in the dark earth.
Well done.
T
- Sun May 20, 2018 12:33 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Echappe-Toi
- Replies: 15
- Views: 9647
Echappe-Toi
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Echappe-Toi
A grenade forms the back of his head.
Left hand cupped to his mouth he appears
to yell, or to pray. His eyes are closed,
the pin is in. Today the face of America.
Tomorrow – a splendid granule
or an adult cartoon.
Echappe-Toi
A grenade forms the back of his head.
Left hand cupped to his mouth he appears
to yell, or to pray. His eyes are closed,
the pin is in. Today the face of America.
Tomorrow – a splendid granule
or an adult cartoon.
- Sun May 20, 2018 12:32 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Love Letters
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3996
- Sun May 20, 2018 11:53 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Another Perspective Look at Love
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4445
Re: Another Perspective Look at Love
Hi Tim, This poem contains an engaging set of ideas. I could be misreading it, but it doesn't totally work for me. Here are what occur to me as things to consider. [As usual, feel free to ignore :) ] Dead Love Shop [stolen title from Indar's post] after twenty-six years, people I know divorce...
- Sun May 20, 2018 11:30 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Love Letters
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3996
Re: Love Letters
Ha! Very very entertaining.
For the last six months Schiff has been my pick for VP.
Expressive writing, Indar.
For the last six months Schiff has been my pick for VP.
Expressive writing, Indar.
- Sun May 20, 2018 11:22 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Ebony/Ivory
- Replies: 11
- Views: 8154
Re: Ivory
Wow - love this! A poem with real bite.
So much with so few words.
Excellent opening line, for all of the right reasons.
I like the way the central metaphor carries through the poem.
Only suggestion would be to consider deleting 'innocent' (S.3 L.3).
Roman Red lipstick >
T
So much with so few words.
Excellent opening line, for all of the right reasons.
I like the way the central metaphor carries through the poem.
Only suggestion would be to consider deleting 'innocent' (S.3 L.3).
Roman Red lipstick >
T
- Sun May 20, 2018 11:12 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Silent words
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3650
Re: Silent words
Nice sentimental exposition, G. You have allowed us into your family if only for the length of the reading.
Thanks.
T
Thanks.
T