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Saravanan
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Post by Saravanan » Wed Oct 17, 2018 7:14 am

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HLemma
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Re: To my beloved one

Post by HLemma » Wed Oct 17, 2018 9:44 am

Hi Saravanan..I have to be honest. This is too weighed down with melodrama and clichés. It needs some concrete images to hold it together. 

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