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lisaeagle65
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For My Friend

Post by lisaeagle65 » Fri Apr 05, 2019 7:27 pm

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For My Friend

I walk toward the river
On a path I hadn't noticed before.
A dusk breeze exhales
From the snow bound mountains
As my heavy steps crunch and snap
Old leaves and brittle branches
And a half hidden sun
Scatters orange everywhere.

A leaf lets go
Sways cradle-like
Through color and silence.
Gently, I pick it up
It reminds me of you.
Luminous
In the sleepy sun's descent.
Intricate veins map wisdom
And tenderness, 
Courage and gentle acceptance
Of rigid seasons.
As tree shadows slice the ground
I walk home
With you in my hand.

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: For My Friend

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Fri Apr 05, 2019 7:51 pm

Oh my! What a wonderful tribute to a friend -- I love this.

Cheers

T

Matty11
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Re: For My Friend

Post by Matty11 » Fri Apr 05, 2019 11:29 pm

A heartfelt write, spiritual and personal, which conveyed loss and continuance.

best

Phil
lisaeagle65 wrote:
Fri Apr 05, 2019 7:27 pm
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For My Friend

I walk toward the river
On a path I hadn't noticed before.........like how this sets up the context
A dusk breeze exhales
From the snow bound mountains
As my heavy steps crunch and snap
Old leaves and brittle branches............snap branches?
And a half hidden sun
Scatters orange everywhere.

A leaf lets go
Sways cradle-like
Through color and silence.
Gently, I pick it up
It reminds me of you.
Luminous
In the sleepy sun's descent.
Intricate veins map wisdom
And tenderness, 
Courage and gentle acceptance....you've already used gently, tenderness is enough?
Of rigid seasons.
As tree shadows slice the ground
I walk home
With you in my hand............lovely closure

 

indar
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Re: For My Friend

Post by indar » Sun Apr 07, 2019 10:07 am

As tree shadows slice the ground

Oh yes! I am always in awe of those who say much through imagery. 

lisaeagle65
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Re: For My Friend

Post by lisaeagle65 » Sun Apr 07, 2019 6:33 pm

Thank you all,
You're right Phil, just tenderness does it. :)

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