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May Haiku
In summer
the secret of snow lives in salt bins
next to my front door.
Violets invade
until May when flowering
unmasks them as guests.
The weight of water
holds my bird bath still while perched
jays assess the risk.
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Very nice Jackie, Particularly enjoyed the notion of flowers being unmasked.
Phil
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Thank you, Phil. I'm having a hard time writing these days—life keeps getting in the way.
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I really loved these. Striking and arresting images.
Dave
Dave
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I like them all, but I am particularly entranced by the 'secret of snow living in the salt bins'.
Jackie, even a few words now and then is better than none at all.
Gyppo
Jackie, even a few words now and then is better than none at all.
Gyppo
I've been writing ever since I realised I could. Storytelling since I started talking. Poetry however comes and goes
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In summer
the secret of snow lives in salt bins
next to my front door.
Violets invade
until May when flowering
unmasks them as guests.
The weight of water
holds my bird bath still while perched
jays assess the risk.
As a former Minnesotan I know about that salt but what a visual to combine snow and salt hidden away for the summer.
I agree with the sense of fun in the idea of "unmasking of flowers".
The third might be my favorite as a bird observer with a birdbath outside my kitchen window and orange tree alongside. So amusing to see how different birds execute risk assessment making their way to water.
Wonderful collection
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Dave, Gyppo and Linda, thank you!
Birds entrance me, Linda, funnily enough only in the last 10 years. I don't know why I didn't pay attention to them before.
Jackie
Birds entrance me, Linda, funnily enough only in the last 10 years. I don't know why I didn't pay attention to them before.
Jackie
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Wonderful poeming Jackie.
But number 3 is exceptional
But number 3 is exceptional
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Very nice writing -- evocative, compelling. I would consider loosening the grip on syllable counts.
Just my thought.
Just my thought.