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Posted: **Tue Jul 13, 2021 4:06 pm**

I don’t know how Santa does it,

stopping at so many homes,

squeezing himself down dirty chimneys

whilst weighing twenty-odd stone.

In fact, I’d say it’s suspicious,

a downright impossible task,

and can we believe that Rudolf et al.

could really fly so fast?

You might ask, “how do children

get all those wonderful gifts?”

It seems to me an exhausting task

that could only be done in shifts.

We all have a curious neighbour

who smiles whenever we meet.

He’ll dress himself up on Christmas Eve –

there’s a Santa on every street.

Posted: **Wed Jul 14, 2021 1:28 am**

It is well written and fun Trevor. It took a little while reading a loud to find a comfortable rhythm given the various lengths of the lines and the fluid metre. Something closer to iambic pentameter would flow perhaps more easily.

I am curious at the age of the children to which it might be pitched, since it reveals in its own way the myth behind the man.

Posted: **Wed Jul 14, 2021 1:59 am**

Hi Trev

I like the notion of a Santa on every street. Perhaps a 'cheery' rather than the more adult 'curious'? Not being politically correct, but kids can be sensitive about weight...

Phil

Posted: **Mon Jul 19, 2021 9:55 am**

Thanks for the feedback, Dave and Phil. Nice to get it.

Trev

Posted: **Mon Jul 19, 2021 9:56 am**

Thanks for the feedback, Dave and Phil. Nice to get it.

Trev

Posted: **Mon Jul 19, 2021 9:56 am**

Thanks for the feedback, Dave and Phil. Nice to get it.

Trev

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