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If I was a Superhero

Posted: Sun Sep 26, 2021 7:13 pm
by TrevorConway
If I was a superhero,
I wouldn’t save the world.
Instead, I’d use my powers
for mischief and fun.

My invisibility
would come in very handy
to walk in my underwear
through a crowded city.

Able to leap to the sky and back,
there’d be no waiting
on traffic lights
to let me cross the street.

And when I’d spy my enemy,
my brother who likes to pick on me,
I’d turn myself to liquid –
a sudden puddle to soak him.

My weakness would be cinnamon,
because, well, why not?
I’d douse it in my porridge
and feel too sick for school.

But now that I think of it,
I have loads of powers:
I can spell and write and draw and play.
I can even run really fast –

all this, and I’m only forty.
Yes, it’s clear to me now;
there can only be one conclusion:
I’m a superhero already.

[I wrote this a while back. I think I wanted to be funny in the last verse, but not so sure now that it worked out that way. Whatever about the execution, how do the general idea & development of thought sit with ye? Honest feedback appreciate, as some pieces are better off abandoned to work on more promising ones. Thanks. Trev]
 

Re: If I was a Superhero

Posted: Fri Oct 01, 2021 6:39 am
by Matty11
there’d be no waiting
on traffic lights
Like that one. I must admit I like cinnamon. I feel you could go more Roald Dahl daft on this eg
My weakness would be cabbage,
because, well, why not?
I’d soak it in porridge
and feel too yuck for school.
I hated most school dinners...especially cabbage (I'd douse it in vinegar!)

Phil

ps
there’d be no waiting
on that 'ollipop man,
Just a thought.
And when I’d spy that snoop,
my bro', who farts on me,
I’d turn myself to gloop –
a puddle to sludge him.
And another!

Re: If I was a Superhero

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2021 6:52 pm
by TrevorConway
Hi Phil,

Thanks for the feedback nd new ideas. Good stuff  :D

Trev