Re: Going home
Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2022 7:22 pm
You open this so well. L2 is an original way describe someone, 'ego' I take to mean self-respect, and 'body electric' refers to a dynamic personality. The clock falling is a powerful image. These four lines show us so much.
S2 is a show of strength. L5 is particularly poignant. Loved the image of silly religions fighting for attention and placing the clay above instead of below; and 'clay, cartoon ceiling' tells me all I need to know about the N's thoughts on the matter.
S3 is rather lovely, and S4 even more so.
Some of your poems can be challenging, not so this one. The impression I got was that it was important for the meaning to transfer, and the eloquence with which you achieved that is stunning.
S2 is a show of strength. L5 is particularly poignant. Loved the image of silly religions fighting for attention and placing the clay above instead of below; and 'clay, cartoon ceiling' tells me all I need to know about the N's thoughts on the matter.
S3 is rather lovely, and S4 even more so.
Some of your poems can be challenging, not so this one. The impression I got was that it was important for the meaning to transfer, and the eloquence with which you achieved that is stunning.