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TrevorConway
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The Hunt

Post by TrevorConway » Fri Jan 21, 2022 12:13 pm

In the toilet, I dreamed of my daughter
as something other,
a starved beast that would hunt me from this room
if only she could smell me. 

In recent months,
her teeth had broken through her gums
in readiness for the act,
and she had been tiring me, waking at night,
so I’d have no fight to give. 

Her slow, light, predator steps
stopped at the door. 

I twisted the key,
submitted to her open arms, 

the gentlest killing
I could ever imagine.

Dave
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Re: The Hunt

Post by Dave » Sat Jan 22, 2022 1:59 am

Very sweet and delightfully put together

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Re: The Hunt

Post by TrevorConway » Mon Jan 24, 2022 10:44 am

Hi Dave,

Thanks for the feedback. Good to know it works fairly well for you overall.

Trev

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Colm Roe
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Re: The Hunt

Post by Colm Roe » Mon Jan 24, 2022 5:22 pm

It works very well, Trev  :)

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Re: The Hunt

Post by TrevorConway » Mon Jan 31, 2022 1:25 pm

Thanks, Colm. Good to hear it.

Trev

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